Photo by Nemo's Great Uncle
The old man
picks the fruit
cautiously.
Laurie Kuntz
Artwork by Mattheus van Helmont
family christmas
the one who drinks calls
just to talk
Roberta Beary
Artwork (detail) by Sidney Paget
a prize-winning chrysanthemum!
the old man
weeps
Issa
trans. by David G. Lanoue
best,
Don
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Great haiku...
ReplyDelete-Patrick
Always so great to hear from you, Patrick. Glad you liked the work. Don
ReplyDeleteDelicious haikai verses! :-)
ReplyDeleteI was particularly interested in the double space between 'drink' and 'calls' that comes across as an expert stand up comedian's timing.
A double-edged haikai verse deserving to be called both a haiku and a senryu.
Oh, how I love a deeply crafted and thought out senryu that has that bitter-sweet poignancy plus irony.
As always, a nod and a thanks to Issa (and David Lanoue) as well as nods and thank you to Laurie Kuntz, and Roberta Beary.
warmest of regards,
Alan
Area 17 blog weblink: Alan's haiku blog
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I'm a big fan of Roberta Beary. Good to see her here again.
ReplyDeleteAlan:
ReplyDeleteThanks so much - it's always a good day when you stop by!
I was intrigued by the extra space, too, not sure if it was intended but I kept it as it was in the manuscript.
Cheers,
Don
Bart:
ReplyDeleteThanks ... have some great news, purely coincidental. I've had email from Roberta and she is coming to town in two weeks and asked if I could arrange a reading and I have. It will be at the new Classic Lines bookshop in Sq. Hill, Friday April 24th, at 7 pm if you are around. More about this forthcoming.
best,
Don