Photo by Basoo
old banyan--
childhood still clings to
the tire swings
Yesha Shah
Photo by Kenneth Cole Schneider
morning glory-
for a moment I am
the butterfly
Kashinath Karmakar
Photo by June Marie
swinging on the swing
clutching
cherry blossoms
Issa
translated by David G. Lanoue
best,
Don
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8 comments:
ah, the morning glory poem describes the feeling perfectly.
Enjoyed these.
Gosh, I do like to be spoilt and it isn't often that two featured poets can keep up with Issa. :-)
old banyan--
childhood still clings to
the tire swings
Yesha Shah
Just the first line conjures both concrete richness, as well as cultural and spiritual rewards.
The phrasing of the last two lines is immaculate. I'm not bothered by the hanging preposition, whether I should be or not.
That phrase, expertly companioned by the first line sets up an incredible resonance with me as a reader.
The poem is multi-sensory.
Fine work!
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morning glory-
for a moment I am
the butterfly
Kashinath Karmakar
Deceptively simple and simplistic, but layered with the welcoming of a reader into its world.
The line breaks for the phrase of the last two lines is keenly achieved, and for a moment, I am, and so is the butterfly.
Incredibly strong work by both poets!
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And many thanks to Issa and his companion David Lanoue, who always gives us such delicious gifts of translation.
warmest regards,
Alan
Area 17 blog weblink: Alan's haiku blog
Cheers, né ...
Thanks, Bart ... nice work when you can get it!
Alan ... you break down near perfection perfectly ... thanks so much, Don
Thank you so much Don!Lovely pictures accompanying all the haiku.Thanks to Alan and Womanimal for inspiring words!
Thank you, Kash, for the wonderful poem - Don
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